As someone who has read pretty much every piece of warcraft lore literature I can lay my hands on, let me congratulate you for that awesome read. Well researched, thoroughly plausable in every detail, and in my opinion better than several of Blizzard's own commissioned stories. Hey, if that was extended to full novelisation, I'd buy that. Something to think about when you meet them, perhaps...

Congratulations :)

I just finished reading your story and I was pleasantly surprised! Much better than most fanfic I have read. You did a great job of bringing three relative "flat," ignored characters to life, especially Lor'themar. I do hope you plan on continuing to write. Authors usually only get better with practice and this is a very good, no, great start. Anyway, kudos to you, from one writer to another.

I have to say after reading nearly all of the Warcraft novels published by Blizzard, I would rank this right around the top. The only thing that would have made it better would have been if it was at least 100 pages longer!

I really enjoyed your story Sarah. Blizzard gave the high/blood elves a rich and complex history and you wove it all together nicely. I think one of the greatest "gifts" the blood elves have given the Horde is representation in Dalaran. What this means for the future of Aethas, the Kirin Torr, and even the under-represented troll mages is exciting. Now maybe you can explain how all those high elves got into the Argent Crusade!

Sigh.

I’m not exactly sure what I’m frustrated over more, my inability of thinking of something positive to say regarding the story, or that it has taken me this long to write something at all.

Honestly, I felt that the writing was too dry. There were a lot of descriptive words in there, but they felt more like “lets open the thesaurus and tack this on” instead of adding to flow and direction. If this was a drink it would be filled with dust choking the reader as it went down. Description should flow smoothly in the story and further the development within. In the time it took to tack on the words, you could have used that to develop the characters, add history and NOT assume (NEVER assume) that the readers will know the background. Take pride in your work by adding that information in. Sure some people might bitch because they know the stuff, BUT not everyone will and if you’re trying to get as many people to read your story as possible that’s something you need to keep in mind. Description without development, characters without true explanation just make for one long boring read.

I still have to read the others so for all I know this was the “best” of the bunch. ....