I'd start with some tight narration and plot editing. While Romire obviously had a story in mind with Ties That Bind, it's easy to lose track of the plot point over 11 minutes. While long-form videos are certainly viable, it's usually best to maintain a very tight narrative focus in machinima. Famous pieces like Tales of the Past and Return are masterpieces for a reason; not every machinima can mimic that level of complexity or epic narration.
There were a few jokes in the video, like a brief Mortal Kombat shout-out. Stuff like that is awesome, but it felt out of place in a longer, more serious video. Visually, I think Romire's come a long, long way. But for the next piece, I'd aim for a short, simple plot to start polishing the storytelling.
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