How to write a roleplaying description that pops

All the world's a stage, and all the men and women merely players. In World of Warcraft, that player is you! Each week, Anne Stickney brings you All the World's a Stage with helpful hints, tips and tricks on the art of roleplay in WoW.
We're taking a break from our whirlwind tour of Azeroth's finest roleplay locations to address an issue that has come up time and time again -- and will probably continue popping up until the day Warcraft closes the doors to Azeroth for good. There are several addons out there for roleplay, and all of them allow a certain amount of customization to help you build your character whatever way you see fit. Most allow for some degree of character description, and some even allow players to write up a brief character history, as well.
But time and time again, players point out errors in the descriptions of others or flaws in fantastical backstories that simply should not exist in the Warcraft universe. So what makes a good roleplaying description? What should it have, and what should it definitely not mention at all? And perhaps most importantly -- what do you do when you run across a roleplayer whose description is blatantly out of line with Warcraft canon, taking liberties with the lore you love?
We're taking a break from our whirlwind tour of Azeroth's finest roleplay locations to address an issue that has come up time and time again -- and will probably continue popping up until the day Warcraft closes the doors to Azeroth for good. There are several addons out there for roleplay, and all of them allow a certain amount of customization to help you build your character whatever way you see fit. Most allow for some degree of character description, and some even allow players to write up a brief character history, as well.
But time and time again, players point out errors in the descriptions of others or flaws in fantastical backstories that simply should not exist in the Warcraft universe. So what makes a good roleplaying description? What should it have, and what should it definitely not mention at all? And perhaps most importantly -- what do you do when you run across a roleplayer whose description is blatantly out of line with Warcraft canon, taking liberties with the lore you love?

Whether you're using a simple addon or going all out with Total RP 2, the description is pretty much the key to making your character your own. One of the most common mistakes that people make with character descriptions is that they confuse them with character histories. Both are used to describe your character, that part is true, but your character description should never detail parts of your character's life. That's what most addons have a history tab for.
When you're trying to put together a description, think of it this way: If you were a random stranger who happened upon your character while walking down the street, what would you see? What would your character look like? How would he or she be acting? A character description is basically a verbal description of a snapshot of your character. It's a physical description, not an in-depth description. You can't tell a person's life story by simply looking at them; the same applies to the character that you play.
There are plenty of things that can be included within a description, however.
- Age Don't include your character's exact age -- most people can't tell a person's age from a glance. But they can tell whether someone is young or old, usually ... unless there's a lot of magic or plastic surgery at work.
- Height Again, an exact measurement isn't necessary, but you can definitely tell whether someone is short, tall, or average just by taking a look at them.
- Weight Weight is one of those things that is subjective, depending on the person who is observing. Some people notice when someone is overly thin; some people don't take weight into account at all when they're talking to another person. Generally speaking, unless your character is incredibly thin or incredibly overweight, it's probably not worth mentioning here.
- Eyes A lot of people take a great deal of time writing about their character's eyes. Is it necessary? Not especially. But the eyes are said to be the window to the soul -- and if your character is sad, or happy, or tired, or angry, their eyes will more often than not give that emotion away.
- Demeanor This is probably the most tricky thing to add to a description. It's also something that you may want to change from time to time. Remember how I said you can't really tell a person's life story from simply looking at them? You can't -- but you can get a general impression of how they're feeling or what sort of attitude they have. Things like posture and stance, smiling or frowning, or even a neutral expression are all subtle hints at what's going on in your character's head, and they're all things that would be noticed by someone watching your character.
- Scars and other features Does your character have noticeable scars on their face? You may want to mention that in their description. Does he have a tattoo of a Celestial Steed on his rear end? Unless he're walking around sans pants, it's probably not worth mentioning in the description. Does she have a visible piece of jewelry that she wears all the time, like a sparkling ring or an ornate necklace? That should be mentioned.
- Smells Some people go out of their way to give a full experience and write about how their character smells. Is this really necessary? Probably not. Unless your character absolutely reeks of perfume, cologne, or unpleasant body odors, chances are that a random passerby really isn't going to take note of how they smell.

When you're writing a description for your character, there are a few common things that tend to raise people's eyebrows. While you can certainly add these in if you really feel it necessary, keep in mind that these are the sorts of things that upset people, and don't be surprised if someone calls you on it.
- History Anything having to do with your character's history likely shouldn't be added to their description. By history, I mean a factual presentation of the events in their life. If your character is wearing something that is a family heirloom, you can always mention that, because it's a physical representation of their history. But talking about how many years they lived in Dolanaar is something that should be relegated to the history tab, not included in the character description.
- Attributes Let's just use the delicate term here, all right? By attributes, I'm talking about things like bust size or how shapely or endowed your character happens to be. Is it something that people notice? Some do, some don't. What you should ask yourself before you write it down is this: Does it really add to what people need to know about your character? Is the fact that they are well endowed something that everyone needs to know? Do you wander around telling random strangers what your bust size is? If the answer is no, then maybe you should think about what including that information really says about your character -- because chances are, the first assumption that people are going to make with a descriptor like that is that your character spends their off nights working in the Goldshire Inn.
- Godmodding Yes, roleplayers of the world, you can godmod via your character description, and there are an awful lot of players who go out of their way to do this. Sentences such as "You are frightened of this draenei," or "The moment you see this troll, you feel instantly attracted to her," or "The human turns toward you and winks, leaving you flustered and confused" can be considered godmodding. Godmodding is pretty much any time you as a player make a statement that can be construed as controlling another player's character. Maybe your character isn't as intimidating as you'd think, or maybe that character that is approaching yours isn't at all attracted to your character. The point is, it's up to them, not you, to decide.
- Obscenities or pornography It's a fact of life -- there are roleplayers out there who are all about one thing, whether it's sex or being as blatantly rude as possible. Roleplaying is a creative experience, and some choose to express their creativity in ways that others don't care for. That's fine. However, this game is played by a multitude of people of varying ages, and these roleplay addons are downloadable by anyone of any age. Now think about this, and think about it really hard -- if you had a little brother or sister or a child who was playing this game and decided to try roleplaying, would you want them to read your description? Would you want them using the same language you used? If the answer is no, don't put it in your description.

So what do you do if you see things that break the general rules of character descriptions? Here's the thing about roleplaying addons -- you cannot report a player for something that exists in a player-created addon. Blizzard's got no way to monitor these addons or what is included in them, and since it is not a Blizzard addon, it doesn't really have any responsibility to monitor that content. You can certainly send in a report if a player is engaging in public channels with language or actions that could be viewed as reportable, but a roleplay description? You can't really report that.
You can try to correct the player on what should be in a description if you like -- but outright attacking them for what they've written is the wrong way to go about it. Some players simply don't realize that descriptions are for descriptions only; some are beginning roleplayers who simply haven't figured things out yet. If you're polite and friendly, you're likely going to get a friendly and polite response in return -- and if you're rude, be prepared to end up on someone's ignore list.
But in the end, nobody can force you to roleplay. If you find someone's description offensive, don't roleplay with them. Don't bother reading their description, and don't bother interacting with them. If they ask you why you aren't roleplaying, you may want to gently let them know -- it could change their mind. Roleplay is a social activity, and as with any other, being rude or offensive will likely get you nowhere.
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Reader Comments (Page 1 of 3)
Sarah Bee Jan 28th 2012 2:04PM
Role-players shouldn't need to get an addon to do this. Take note, Blizzard.
Possum Jan 28th 2012 10:04PM
Everquest used to have a description field in it's normal character pane. I miss Everquest /rosetintedglasses.
I think part of the problem would be that Blizzard would then have to police the descriptions. With third party addons they don't have that responsibility.
Bart Jan 28th 2012 2:30PM
In my opinion, above all: Keep. It. Short. As a rule I never scroll down the MRP profile, am I lazy? Maybe, but me nor most people want to read an entire essay on your character's looks.
LynMars Jan 28th 2012 5:05PM
This gets important during busy social events or fast-moving RP scenes; a lot of people don't have time or inclination to read long, convoluted, overly-detailed descriptions.
It's pretty common on RP sites to find suggestions for writing and improving RSP descriptions. I try to provide similar assistance for my guild mates. A lot of the suggestions given here are common ones, and good ones, though mileage may vary about what parts of description are necessary or unimportant.
But the idea of keeping things short (even just a list, or incomplete sentences, if one finds the description getting too long-winded or flowery), really helps. Let the descriptive language come through in RP; people reading the RSP generally just want an idea of who they're looking at. Sure, some want to be entertained by the description, too, but it's still possible to use snappy sentences and the best words to keep it short *and* good writing.
On that token: seriously, use the proper words. Check the definition if you have to to be sure it means what you think it does. Fancy adjectives don't help if they aren't the right ones, or contradict each other.
Marcosius Jan 28th 2012 5:43PM
I wouldn't be so strict - if I find the description interesting then I will read all of it, no matter how long it is.
Personally I try to keep all information short and to the point, however for example my technomage has a fairly long history description, as I think this is important stuff for people to know, even if it's OOC information. A a counter, my blood elf warlock is old and looks older, so her appearance is described in much more detail than I usually care to write.
Snuzzle Jan 28th 2012 6:05PM
I agree. I have a char I keep on an RP server (if I had the real life money Id transfer over a few others) whose description is roughly three sentences. That's really all you need to know. If your character has an especially shrewd eye, you can whisper and ask for more details to start a conversation with, but unless your character is staring at mine how much can you really tell about me? Certainly not enough to fill three, four, or more paragraphs.
lukenio Jan 28th 2012 2:34PM
People who change established lore.
ALL. MY. RAGE.
Worgen with tails.
ALL. MY. RAGE.
Half vampire, half worgen, half elf, half demon, half heavy weapons guy.
ALL. MY. RAGE.
My list is complete.
Bart Jan 28th 2012 2:39PM
Agree to all.
Worgen are not werewolves.
Half-breeds are usually people trying to be unique.
I actually don't mind half-breeds if they're done properly, make sense and aren't the -only- aspect of them that's interesting.
Marco Polaris Jan 28th 2012 3:03PM
Yeah, it's often about being unique in WoW. Though sometimes, especially in tabletop RPGs, players do just as much as a way to "cherry-pick" the parts they like about different races and create some kind of bizarre genetic cocktail.
Earl Jan 29th 2012 1:28PM
...Heavy Weapons Guy? Seriously? How far do nonsensical descriptions GO in this day and age?
Randomize Jan 28th 2012 2:38PM
I love the last paragraph in the header image. MC Hammer all the way.
George Jan 28th 2012 2:43PM
Well played.
xero759 Jan 28th 2012 2:56PM
That would actually be Sir Mix-a-lot my good man!
Randomize Jan 28th 2012 5:22PM
That's what I get for writing with a hangover :P
Snark Jan 28th 2012 5:51PM
It's okay to make an honest mistake, you know? No need to blame it on the a-a-a-a-alcohol, baby.
Kadamon Jan 28th 2012 7:07PM
For some reason, everyone I know mixes Hammer and Mix-a-Lot when it comes to that song...
Also, well played Anne, the only thing better would've been a Prince of Bel-Air ending.
Earl Jan 29th 2012 1:28PM
It's my favorite WoWInsider image. Every time I see it I spontaneously start singing it.
exogenesis. Jan 28th 2012 2:46PM
I've recently started an attempt at roleplaying with my friend. We both chose draenei as our race, so we decided to make our characters sisters. Thus, in my description & history, I mentioned things to do with his character, and things that his character had done. We agreed upon it all beforehand, of course, but I'm now a little worried that people will assume I am a godmoder? I am very familiar with the term, being an avid roleplayer on InvisionFree forums, and I really would not like to be associated with it.
Marco Polaris Jan 28th 2012 2:59PM
I think most people will just assume you play together and collaborated your characters. You should be fine.
Snuzzle Jan 29th 2012 10:37AM
Where godmodding comes into play is when you invoke the actions of the reader of your description or history without their consent. The examples given in the article were spot on, but also things like "his childhood is so sad it brings a tear to your eye". Maybe my character is an undead and devoid of emotion, etc etc.
Invoking others in your history (with their consent) = okay.
Invoking the reader = godmodding.